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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v.3

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 3
The supplied bar chart compares the employment rate among men and women workers in 1995 and 2005 in six countries across the globe. It is clear that in 1995, the employment rates in Iceland and Switzerland were comparatively higher than other countries and more men were employed than that of women in the given countries. Male employment rates in Switzerland and Iceland was over 65% while it was exactly 60% in New Zealand in 1995. In this year about 58% Australian male was employed while in the USA it was just below 60%. Finally, in the UK about 55% males were employed. On the other side, women employment rate in this year was comparatively lower (only 27-28%) in Australia and New Zealand. Women in Switzerland had the highest employment rate in this year which was approximately 58%. After 10 years, the employment rate, both for woman and men, increased and the highest employment rate for men could be observed in Iceland (82%) and lowest in Australia (69%). Similarly, the highest women employment rate was in Switzerland (68%) and lowest in Australia (38%). Though the percentage of women employment increased in 2005, men were still ahead of women in employment sectors in these six countries.
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in Switzerland and Iceland was over 65% while it was exactly 60% in New Zealand in 1995. In this
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IELTS academic The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 3

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204 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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