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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v.2

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 2
The column graph shows employment rate variations in six countries, namely, Australia, Switzerland, Ireland, UK, New Zealand and the USA between 1995 and 2005. As is observed, employment rates in these countries improved and there have been notable advancements for women in the workforce. It is obvious that women had lower employment rates in most of the countries. For example, in Australia in 1995, 57 percent of men had a job, but only 27 percent of women were employed. In this year, the highest employment rates for women (70%) was in Iceland where more than 80% men were working class. The second biggest trend in the graph is the improvement in employment between 1995 and 2005. In all countries shown, figures for both men and women employment rates improved. The biggest change was in the United Kingdom, from 55 percent of men in 1995 to 73 percent over the ten years period. Furthermore, the increases in employment rates for women were much higher in New Zealand. The percentage of working women jumped from 25 percent to 42 percent, and in the United States from 45 percent to 61 percent over the decade. In these countries, at least a 12 percent increased both for men and women over the ten years.
The column graph
shows
employment
rate
variations in six
countries
,
namely
, Australia, Switzerland, Ireland, UK, New Zealand and the USA between 1995 and 2005. As
is observed
,
employment
rates
in these
countries
improved
and there have been notable advancements for
women
in the workforce.

It is obvious that
women
had lower
employment
rates
in most of the
countries
.
For example
, in Australia in 1995, 57
percent
of
men
had a job,
but
only
27
percent
of
women
were employed
. In this year, the highest
employment
rates
for
women
(70%) was in Iceland where more than 80%
men
were working
class
.

The second biggest trend in the graph is the improvement in
employment
between 1995 and 2005. In all
countries
shown, figures for both
men
and
women
employment
rates
improved
. The biggest
change
was in the United Kingdom, from 55
percent
of
men
in 1995 to 73
percent
over the ten years period.
Furthermore
, the increases in
employment
rates
for
women
were much higher in New Zealand. The percentage of working
women
jumped from 25
percent
to 42
percent
, and in the United States from 45
percent
to 61
percent
over the decade. In these
countries
, at least a 12
percent
increased both for
men
and
women
over the ten years.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 2

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