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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v.3

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 3
The bar graph compares the spending on six consumer products by citizens in four European countries. Overall, British spent more on these products than the citizens in other three countries did and their highest amount went on purchasing photographic films, toys and CDs. As is observed, English spent 155 thousand pound sterling for purchasing personal stereos and the same amount for tennis racquets. French and German paid around 147 thousand for stereos and Italians a few thousand more. Italians spent the same amount as English did for tennis bats, which was more than the amount spent by Germans and French. British disbursed the highest amount for obtaining photographic films and toys and these amounts stood at 170 and 167 thousand pounds. French people spent 5-6 thousand less on these two items but their spending was higher than the amount paid by Italians and Germans for these two items. Spending on CDs by English was slightly lower than that of toys, 165 thousand and Germans spent the least amount on this product. Finally, British people spent 160 thousand for buying perfumes and it was 155, 150 and around 146 thousand by Italian, German and French respectively.
The bar graph compares the spending on six consumer products by citizens in four European countries.
Overall
, British
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spent
more on these products than the citizens in other three countries did and their highest
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amount
went on purchasing photographic films, toys and CDs.

As
is observed
, English
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spent
155 thousand pound sterling for purchasing personal stereos and the same
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amount
for tennis racquets. French and German paid around 147 thousand for stereos and Italians a few thousand more. Italians
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spent
the same
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amount
as English did for tennis bats, which was more than the
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amount
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spent
by Germans and French.

British disbursed the highest
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amount
for obtaining photographic films and toys and these
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amounts
stood at 170 and 167 thousand pounds. French
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people
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spent
5-6 thousand less on these two items
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but
their spending was higher than the
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amount
paid by Italians and Germans for these two items.

Spending on CDs by English was
slightly
lower than that of toys, 165 thousand and Germans
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spent
the least
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amount
on this product.
Finally
, British
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people
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spent
160 thousand for buying perfumes and it was 155, 150 and around 146 thousand by Italian, German and French
respectively
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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 3

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195 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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