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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v.2

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 2
The chart gives information regarding the money spent on consumer goods namely photographic film, toys, CDs, perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos by 4 countries in Europe (Britain, France, Italy and Germany). The units are in Pound Sterling. Overall, British, among the four countries, spent most of their money in all the 6 consumer goods in contrast with Germany spending the least amount for those products. British also spent the highest amount to purchase photographic films while France spent the least amount on tennis racquets. In terms of photographic film, Britain spent well above 170 thousand pounds. This is the highest money spent on any consumer goods. France came in the second position in terms of their spending which was more or less 165 thousand. Italians and Germans compared to the two latter countries, spent around 150, 000 and 145, 000 respectively. Toys and CDs are the second and third most purchased by the 4 countries. Furthermore, Britain and France purchased tennis racquets the least with only around 155000 and 145000 respectively. Italy spent the least of their money in buying personal stereos with exactly 150000 same as well in Germany spending around 3000 pounds fewer than that of Italy.
The chart gives information regarding the
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photographic film, toys, CDs, perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos by 4 countries in Europe (Britain, France, Italy and Germany). The units are in Pound Sterling.

Overall
, British, among the four countries,
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most of their
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in all the 6 consumer
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in contrast
with Germany spending the least amount for those products. British
also
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the highest amount to
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purchase
photographic films while France
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the least amount on tennis racquets. In terms of photographic film, Britain
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well above 170 thousand pounds. This is the highest
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money
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spent
on any consumer
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goods
. France came in the second position in terms of their spending which was more or less 165 thousand. Italians and Germans compared to the two latter countries,
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around 150, 000 and 145, 000
respectively
. Toys and CDs are the second and third most
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purchased
by the 4 countries.

Furthermore
, Britain and France
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purchased
tennis racquets the least with
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around 155000 and 145000
respectively
. Italy
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the least of their
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in buying personal stereos with exactly 150000 same
as well
in Germany spending around
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3000 pounds
fewer than that of Italy.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 2

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