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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v.1

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 1
The bar chart compares the expenditure on different consumer goods by the people of four European countries; namely Britain, France, Italy and Germany. At the first glance, British spent more money on consumer goods while Germans spent the least. It is worth noticing that, British spent more than 170 thousand pound sterling for photographic films which is the highest amount spent on any consumer goods. British also spent more than 160 thousand for purchasing Toys and CDs, which is higher than that of by any other nation. For perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos, they spent more than other nations as well. On the other hand, French people spent around 165 thousand for purchasing photographic films, which makes it the highest amount they spent on consumer goods. French citizens spent about 158 thousand on toys which is a tie with Italians. For photographic films, toys and CDs, their spending totalled second highest among the given four nations. Finally, they spent less than 150 thousand on remaining consumer goods. Italian citizens spent around 150 thousand on personal stereos, tennis racquets and CDs while they spent about 5 thousand more on photographic films and toys. Finally, Germans spent the fewer amount in all consumer items than any other nation and their average spending was 145 thousand.
The bar chart compares the expenditure on
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goods
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people
of four European countries;
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spent
more money on
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goods
while Germans
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spent
the least.

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more than 170 thousand pound sterling for
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photographic
films which is the highest amount
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on any
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consumer
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goods
. British
also
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spent
more than 160 thousand for purchasing
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Toys
and CDs, which is higher than that of by any
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other
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nation
. For perfumes, tennis racquets and personal stereos, they
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hand, French
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people
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around 165 thousand for purchasing
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photographic
films, which
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goods
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French citizens
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spent
about 158 thousand on
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toys
which is a tie with Italians. For
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photographic
films,
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toys
and CDs, their spending
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second highest among the
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less than 150 thousand on remaining
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consumer
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Italian citizens
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around 150 thousand on personal stereos, tennis racquets and CDs while they
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about 5 thousand more on
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photographic
films and
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toys
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Finally
, Germans
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spent
the fewer amount in all
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consumer
items than any
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and their average spending was 145 thousand.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. v. 1

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214 words
6.5
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