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the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v.2

the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v. 2
Given is the line chart illustrating information about the amount of time which 3 different companies need to produce a car over the period of 10 years since 2000. In general, it is evident that Toyota spent the time to make a car was the least. Besides, the figures for 3 different groups increased from 2000 to 2012. As can be seen from the line chart, Toyota was the company need the least time to produce a car, with under 20 days in 2000 and this number was witnessed a slight rise to above 20 days after 4 years. in 2012, there was reached the bottom at close to 10 days for Toyota to make a car. According to Ford, this group was needed under 30 days to finish a car in 2000. The next 4 years of this period, there are seen a significant rise to nearly 10 days, almost 4 times compared with this number of at the end of the periods. The last group - Honda, in which the figure was seen a slight increase from close 30 to close 40 days in the first 6 years of the period and unchanged in the next 2 years before reducing to 35 at the end of the period.
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companies
need to produce a
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car
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of 10 years since 2000.
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, it is evident that Toyota spent the
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car
was the least.
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groups increased from 2000 to 2012.

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from the line chart, Toyota was the
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need the least
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time
to produce a
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, with under 20 days in 2000 and this number
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in
2012, there
was reached
the bottom at close to 10 days for Toyota to
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a car.

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was needed
under 30 days to finish a
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in 2000. The
next
4 years of this
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period
, there are
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10 days, almost 4
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times
compared with this number of at the
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of the
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. The last group
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Honda, in which the figure was
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a slight increase from close 30 to close 40 days in the
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and unchanged in the
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IELTS academic the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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