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The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 in Someland. v.1

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 in Someland. v. 1
The given bar chart shows data on the number of male and female fitness members of Someland from 1970 to 2000. As is presented in the graph, the number of female fitness members increased over time but this number decreased for male fitness members. Initially, in 1970, there were more than 2000 male fitness members while there were only 1000 female fitness members. After 5 years the male fitness members' number increased to 4000 which was double compared to the 1970's total male number. The female fitness members also increased for this year and reached to 2000. But in 1980 the number for male decreased rapidly and reached to approximately 2500 while the number for female also decreased. Till 1995, these numbers fluctuated and in 1995, the male fitness members' number reached to the peak numbering 5000 in total. This year there were almost 2800 female fitness members in Someland. But finally, in 2000, the number of male and female fitness members dropped again and reached to 2000 for male and 1000 for female. In conclusion, the number of fitness member increased till 1995 and finally in 2000, the number reached to a similar pattern that was in 1970.
The
given
bar chart
shows
data on the
number
of male and
female
fitness
members
of
Someland
from 1970 to 2000. As
is presented
in the graph, the
number
of
female
fitness
members
increased
over time
but
this
number
decreased for male
fitness
members.

Initially
, in 1970, there were more than 2000 male
fitness
members
while there were
only
1000
female
fitness
members
.
After
5 years the male
fitness
members'
number
increased
to 4000 which was double compared to the
1970's
total male
number
. The
female
fitness
members
also
increased
for this year and
reached
to 2000.
But
in 1980 the
number
for male decreased
rapidly
and
reached
to approximately 2500 while the
number
for
female
also
decreased. Till 1995, these
numbers
fluctuated and in 1995, the male
fitness
members'
number
reached
to the peak numbering 5000 in total. This year there were almost 2800
female
fitness
members
in
Someland
.
But
finally
, in 2000, the
number
of male and
female
fitness
members
dropped again and
reached
to 2000 for male and 1000 for female.

In conclusion
, the
number
of
fitness
member
increased
till 1995 and
finally
in 2000, the
number
reached
to a similar pattern that was in 1970.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 in Someland. v. 1

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