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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v.2

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v. 2
The presented chart gives information on the challenges the different age groups of people face when immigrating to another country. As is presented, the three most common challenges all age groups face are making friends, finding a place to live and learning the local dialect.   The biggest difficulty the age group of people aged over 55 faces is learning the local language as compared to the other age groups, who don’t find it as difficult.   It is surprising to find that both age groups of 18-34 and 35-54 have challenges in finding a place to settle.   It is easier for the age group of over 55 to find a place to settle as they do not have to take many factors into consideration when deciding where to settle, for example, finding a place close to work, what kind of neighbourhood is good for bringing up a family, what public facilities are available in the area, access to the internet etc.   But they don’t have a hard time making friends as it is probably easier for them to do when still young. To summarise, according to this chart, it is easier to go and live in another country while you are still young rather than when you are over the age of 55 as it is more difficult for you to adapt to the new culture and customs in a new country.
The presented chart gives information on the challenges the
different
age
groups
of
people
face when immigrating to another country.

As
is presented
, the three most common challenges all
age
groups
face are making friends, finding a
place
to
live
and learning the local dialect.
 
The biggest difficulty the
age
group
of
people
aged over 55 faces is learning the local language as compared to the other
age
groups
, who don’t find it as difficult.
 
It is surprising to find that both
age
groups
of 18-34 and 35-54 have challenges in finding a
place
to settle.
 
It is easier for the
age
group
of over 55 to find a
place
to settle as they do not
have to
take
many
factors into consideration when deciding where to settle,
for example
, finding a
place
close to work, what kind of
neighbourhood
is
good
for bringing up a family, what public facilities are available in the area, access to the internet etc.
 
But
they don’t have a
hard
time making friends as it is
probably
easier for them to do when
still
young.

To
summarise
, according to this chart, it is easier to go and
live
in another country while you are
still
young
rather
than when you are over the
age
of 55 as it is more difficult for you to adapt to the new culture and customs in a new country.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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