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The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged 15-24 in Canada in 2000. v. 1

The bar chart outlines online activities of young Canadian males and females who were between 15 to 24 years old in the year 2000. Generally speaking, email communication was the most common activity among these users and a higher percentage of male internet users were engaged in social networking than that of females while women email users and online shoppers exceeded the ratio of male netizens. According to the given illustration, young Canadian internet users primarily used email applications and their second most preferred online activity was social networking. Among the internet users, 48% females used emails and this ratio was 7% higher than that of male email users. Regarding the social networking members, 28% of these netizens were males and this ration was exactly 4% higher than that of females. Almost one in five young female intent users did online shopping while male online shopper’s percentage was 13.   The remaining 9% males were involved in other online activities while this was 18%, precisely double in the case of females.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged 15-24 in Canada in 2000. v.1

The bar chart outlines
online
activities
of young Canadian
males
and
females
who were
between 15 to 24
years
old
in the year 2000.
Generally
speaking, email communication was the most common
activity
among these
users
and a higher percentage of male internet
users
were engaged
in social networking than that of
females
while women email
users
and
online
shoppers exceeded the ratio of male netizens. According to the
given
illustration, young Canadian internet
users
primarily
used
email applications and their second most preferred
online
activity
was social networking. Among the internet
users
, 48%
females
used
emails and this ratio was 7% higher than that of male email
users
. Regarding the social networking members, 28% of these netizens were
males
and this ration was exactly 4% higher than that of
females
. Almost one in five young
female
intent
users
did
online
shopping while male
online
shopper’s percentage was 13.
 
The remaining 9%
males
were involved
in other
online
activities
while this was 18%,
precisely
double in the case of
females
.
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