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the chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013
The bar chart describes the citizen of the USA who constantly ate a fast food in 2003 and 2013. Overall, the bar chart which breaks down into three different years as indicators of people ate fast food in 2003, 2006 and 2013. The Y-axis presented the percentage of the people while the X-axis presented the frequency of people ate in fast food restaurant which breaks down into six categories. The highest number of the USA citizen was eaten once or twice a month in 2013. There was around 33 percent of people in the USA. Also, the lowest number was a people who ate fast food in their everyday life. There was around 3 percent of this type of people. Furthermore, in 2006, people in the USA always ate in fast food restaurant once a week. This was indicated from the Y-axis which showed around 33 percent of people. In addition, the graph appeared that the percentage of people ate in their everyday life was as same as in 2013. There was around 3 percent of the people. In 2003, the number of people ate once a week compared with people who ate once or twice a month had slightly different. The people who ate once a week was about 52 percent. However, in that year, people in the USA did not quite a familiar with a fast food. It indicated by the graph which had only 5 percent. This condition was the highest number compares with other years.
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fast
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food
in 2003 and 2013.

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different
years as indicators of
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people
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ate
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fast
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food
in 2003, 2006 and 2013. The Y-axis presented the percentage of the
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people
while the X-axis presented the frequency of
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people
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ate
in
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fast
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food
restaurant which breaks down into six categories.

The highest
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number
of the USA citizen
was eaten
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once
or twice a month in 2013. There was
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around
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of
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people
in the USA.
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who
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fast
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food
in their everyday life. There was
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in their everyday life was as same as in 2013. There was
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In 2003, the
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in the USA did not quite a familiar with a
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. It indicated by the graph which had
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5
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compares with other years.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic the chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
249 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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