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The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. v.2

The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. v. 2
The bar graph compares the changes in property prices in Algeria, China and Argentina from 2007 to 2010. Overall, the growth of property prices in Algeria decreased significantly over the period given, while in China there was a dramatic increase. It is also noticeable that in Argentina the changes of property prices fluctuated. In 2007, the rise of property prices in Algeria started at just over 6%, then it dropped every year to reach a low of less than half of its original number in 2010. In contrast, the changes in property prices in China began at 2% in 2007, after which the figure rose continuously to reach a peak of approximately 7% in the final year, which was the biggest percentage growth among other countries. With regard to Argentina' s property growth rate, at the beginning of the period, it was just over 3% and went up to about 5% in the following year. The figure dropped steeply to roughly 1. 2% in 2009 before climbing to almost 2. 3% in 2010.
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in Algeria, China and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.

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in Algeria decreased
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, while in China there was a dramatic increase. It is
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fluctuated.

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in Algeria
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over 6%, then it dropped every year to reach a low of less than half of its original number in 2010.
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in China began at 2% in 2007, after which the figure rose
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to reach a peak of approximately 7% in the final year, which was the biggest percentage growth among other countries.

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growth rate, at the beginning of the period, it was
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over 3% and went up to about 5% in the following year. The figure dropped
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climbing to almost 2. 3% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. v. 2

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