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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.10

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. v. 10
The given bar chart illustrates the survey of the US resident’s about how often they were more likely to eat cuisines at the fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Overall, it is obvious that the portion of American ate meals once in a week and up to once or twice in a month has the most significant percentage, conversely, the proportion of U. S native never ate and eaten per day is resulted as the lowest number to comparison to others. Admittedly, the quantity of Americans ate in one day a week and once or twice in a month is shown the strikingly higher equal rates up to 30% in 2006 and 2013 respectively. Likewise, the segment of U. S general people ate sometimes in annually is displayed a similar amount up to 15% across the last 7 years. Furthermore, what is remarkable is the number of Americans, none ate and eaten each day had stood at just below 5% throughout the period.
The
given
bar chart illustrates the survey of the US resident’s about how
often
they were more likely to eat cuisines at the
fast
-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, it is obvious that the portion of American
ate
meals once in a week and up to once or twice in a month has the most significant percentage,
conversely
, the proportion of U. S native never
ate
and eaten per day
is resulted
as the lowest number to comparison to others.

Admittedly
, the quantity of Americans
ate
in one day a week and once or twice in a month
is shown
the
strikingly
higher equal rates up to 30% in 2006 and 2013
respectively
.
Likewise
, the segment of U. S general
people
ate
sometimes
in
annually
is displayed
a similar amount up to 15% across the last 7 years.

Furthermore
, what is remarkable is the number of Americans, none
ate
and eaten each day had stood at
just
below 5% throughout the period.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others, however, believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. v. 10

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3 paragraphs
163 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resources: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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