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The chart below show the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The chart below show the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use
The bar chart gives information about three means of transportation which are used by young people in four different countries. Overall, the percentage of young people who use car is the highest in most of the countries except Germany. Besides, bicycle is also loved by young people at these countries. There are 60% of young people using car in Great Britain, which is the same as that for USA. This figure is higher than that for Germany, with only 40% of commuters. However, France has the highest figure for car, at 75%. Around 30% of young people use motorcycle in USA, while there is only about 15% of people travel by motorcycle in other countries. Bicycle is the most transport in Germany which attracts young people, with 45% of users. In contrast, USA and France have a similar figure for bicycle, at just 15% each.
The bar chart gives information about three means of transportation which are
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IELTS academic The chart below show the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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