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The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.5

The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012.
The bar chart compares the prevalence of various types of consumer products across four nations in 2012. All in all, the data differ significantly. As shown in the information registered in 2012, cameras were in the dominate position in British consumer market, whereby a staggering 170, 000 pounds was spent, exceeding its counterpart in Belgium. Likewise, the distinctions in toys and books between these two countries were in line with that of cameras, with its British figures standing at over 165, 000 and over 160, 000 in toys and books respectively. Noteworthy is the fact that, Spain and Austria witnessed a demand overtaking Belgium but surpassed by Britain in both books, toys and cameras. In stark contrast, a different pattern was found in the remaining categories in 2012. In comparison to other countries, Britain saw the highest demand in cosmetics, outdoor game accessories and console games, while Austria invariably positioned at the bottom. For instance, Britain registered a figure over 155, 000 in outdoor game accessories, overtaking its Austria counterpart, which was merely over 140, 000. Overall, among these six categories, the British generally spent more than its peer countries in 2012.
The bar chart compares the prevalence of various types of consumer products across four nations in 2012. All in all, the data differ
significantly
.

As shown in the information registered in 2012, cameras were in
the dominate
position in British consumer market, whereby a staggering 170, 000 pounds
was spent
, exceeding its counterpart in Belgium.
Likewise
, the distinctions in toys and books between these two countries were in line with that of cameras, with its British figures standing at
over
165, 000 and
over
160, 000 in toys and books
respectively
. Noteworthy is the fact that, Spain and Austria witnessed a demand overtaking Belgium
but
surpassed by Britain in both books, toys and cameras.

In stark contrast, a
different
pattern
was found
in the remaining categories in 2012.
In comparison
to other countries, Britain
saw
the highest demand in cosmetics, outdoor game accessories and console games, while Austria
invariably
positioned at the bottom.
For instance
, Britain registered a figure
over
155, 000 in outdoor game accessories, overtaking its Austria counterpart, which was
merely
over
140, 000.

Overall
, among these six categories, the British
generally
spent more than its peer countries in 2012.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about four countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012.

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