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The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use. v.1

The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use. v. 1
The column graph outlines the transportation preference among the young people in Great Britain, USA, Germany and France. As an overall trend, the young generation, except in Germany, mainly like to use the car as a mean of commuting and this ratio is the highest in France. To illustrate, six out of ten British youth favour cars to travel. Less than one-third of them use bicycles and only one of ten youth in the UK pick motorbike to commute. A similar ratio of US adolescents (precise 60%) prefers cars but their preference for motorbikes is higher than that of the UK, 30% to be exact. However, less percentage of American youngsters prefers riding bicycles, only one out of ten. Germany shows an interesting trend where almost half of the adolescents like to ride a bicycle, a trend uncommon in other countries. 40% of them choose cars as their transportation and the rest of them inclined to use motorbikes. Finally, the highest percentage of car-loving youngs are located in France, where around 2 out of 3 adolescent fancy cars over other vehicles. Around 10% French youth use bicycle and a similar percentage ride on motorized bikes.
The column graph outlines the transportation preference among the young
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as a mean of commuting and this ratio is the highest in France.

To illustrate, six out of ten British youth
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favour
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to travel. Less than one-third of them
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use
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bicycles
and
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one of ten youth in the UK pick motorbike to commute. A similar ratio of US adolescents (precise 60%) prefers
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cars
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their preference for motorbikes is higher than that of the UK, 30% to be exact.
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,
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one out of ten. Germany
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an interesting trend where almost half of the adolescents like to ride a
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, a trend uncommon in other countries. 40% of them choose
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as their transportation and the rest of them inclined to
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use
motorbikes.
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in France, where around 2 out of 3 adolescent fancy
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over other vehicles. Around 10% French youth
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and a similar percentage ride on motorized bikes.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the type of transports young people in four countries prefer to use. v. 1

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2 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
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