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The chart below show the percentage of male and famale teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK 2010. v.1

The chart below show the percentage of male and famale teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK 2010. v. 1
The bar charts given below information the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK 2010. The data present in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage was women meanwhile the smallest was men. In the one hand, between women and man which got the biggest percentage was women which got around 80% which was the biggest category namely in the nursery/pre-school, followed by primary school with percentage degree between 80% which was highest second, but for secondary school, college, private institute and university percentage degree experienced decrease between 40% up to around 20%. On the other hand, from men degree percentage from nursery/pre-school, primary school, secondary school, college, private training institute and university experience increase around 0% up to 60% which experienced increase significantly. From the bar charts can be accepted conclusion between women and men which percentage experienced increase was men 60% and women percentage degree experienced decrease as for as around 20%
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IELTS academic The chart below show the percentage of male and famale teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK 2010. v. 1

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