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The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1) v.2

The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1) v. 2
The bar chart below illustrates the amount of Japanese travellers leaving their country, from the year 1985 to 1995. Moreover the second infographic, is a line graph which depicts Australia' s share of the Japan' s tourist industry. In the bar chart, it shows during the year of 1985 the number of people travelling abroad was well over 4. 5 million people. It was the lowest year compared to the next ten years. Then in 1990 the numbers of passengers increased gradually at about approximately over 10 million people. However, the following year (1991) the number of people dropped slightly. Later in 1995 the population of travellers reached it peak in between 16 million and 14 million. On the other hand, the line graph demonstrates Australia' s share of Japan' s tourist industry was at it apex in the year 1994, the percentage rate of an estimate modestly above 6%, but in the following year 1995 the rate declined by a tiny bit at exactly 6%. Moreover during the year from 1985 to 1989 the pattern of the graph was increasing gradually. However, one year after 1989 the rate dropped significantly it was the first anomaly in the graph. Then in 1991 he percentage of the shares rose to approximately the same rate as it was before the big fall. From there on the rates steadily increased.
The bar chart below illustrates the amount of Japanese
travellers
leaving their country, from the
year
1985 to 1995.
Moreover
the second infographic, is a line
graph
which depicts
Australia&
#039; s share of the
Japan&
#039; s tourist industry.

In the bar chart, it
shows
during the
year
of 1985 the number of
people
travelling abroad was well over 4. 5 million
people
. It was the lowest
year
compared to the
next
ten years. Then in 1990 the numbers of passengers increased
gradually
at about approximately over 10 million
people
.
However
, the following
year
(1991) the number of
people
dropped
slightly
. Later in 1995 the population of
travellers
reached it peak in between 16 million and 14 million.

On the other hand
, the line
graph
demonstrates
Australia&
#039; s share of
Japan&
#039; s tourist industry was at it apex in the
year
1994, the percentage
rate
of an estimate
modestly
above 6%,
but
in the following
year
1995 the
rate
declined by a tiny bit at exactly 6%.
Moreover
during the
year
from 1985 to 1989 the pattern of the
graph
was increasing
gradually
.
However
, one
year
after 1989 the
rate
dropped
significantly
it was the
first
anomaly in the
graph
. Then in 1991
he percentage
of the shares rose to approximately the same
rate
as it was
before
the
big
fall. From there on the
rates
steadily
increased.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1) v. 2

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