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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. v.2

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. v. 2
The supplied graphs compare the number of Japanese tourists who travelled different countries from 1985 to 1995 and it also give data on Australia's portion of the Japanese visitors. According to the first bar graph, the number of Japanese tourists visited abroad had increased in each year except for 1991. Initially, in 1985, around 5 million tourists from Japan travelled abroad and after a decade this number more than trebled. About 2 million Japanese tourists went to Australia in 1985. From 1985 till 1988, the number of Japanese tourists in Australia increased sharply. Beginning from 2 million tourists in 1985, it reached to around 5 million in 1988. In 1989, the number fell slightly but from 90 to 94, the number went up. However, in 1994 the number of people who went to Australia decreased a bit. The two graphs represent the steady increase of total Japanese tourists travelling different countries as well as the number of tourists visiting Australia in Particular.
The supplied graphs compare the
number
of Japanese
tourists
who travelled
different
countries from 1985 to 1995 and it
also
give
data on Australia's portion of the Japanese visitors.

According to the
first
bar graph, the
number
of Japanese
tourists
visited abroad had increased in each year
except for
1991.
Initially
, in 1985, around 5
million
tourists
from Japan travelled abroad and after a decade this
number
more than trebled. About 2
million
Japanese
tourists
went to Australia in 1985.
From 1985 till 1988
, the
number
of Japanese
tourists
in Australia increased
sharply
. Beginning from 2
million
tourists
in 1985, it reached to around 5
million
in 1988. In 1989, the
number
fell
slightly
but
from 90 to 94, the
number
went up.
However
, in 1994 the
number
of
people
who went to Australia decreased a bit.

The two graphs represent the steady increase of total Japanese
tourists
travelling
different
countries
as well
as the
number
of
tourists
visiting Australia
in Particular
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. v. 2

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