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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v.4

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v. 4
The bar graph illustrates how many British citizens devoting money to charity by various age groups in the years 1990 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that majority of people donating money aged 36 to 65 for both years and people aged from 18 to 25 were the least to donate money. First and foremost, the most striking feature is that there was an increasing trend in the proportion of British people donating money in 1990 and peaked at people aged 36 to 50 (just above 40%) which is then followed by a gradual drop. The proportion of people who aged over 65 giving money to charity accounted for about 33%. Turning to 2010, it is revealed that there was a significant rise in the percentage of British people who donate money (approximately 6% for those aged 18 to 25 and 24% for that age group of 26 to 35). A similar trend can be observed for the next age group and hit its peak at about 40%for those aged 51 to 65. In contrary, an opposing trend can be seen in the last age group (people aged over 65).
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British citizens devoting
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to charity by various
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age
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in the years 1990 and 2010.
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aged
36 to 65 for both years and
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people
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aged
from 18 to 25 were the least to donate money.

First
and foremost, the most striking feature is that there was an increasing trend in the proportion of British
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people
donating
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money
in 1990 and peaked at
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people
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36 to 50 (
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above 40%) which is then followed by a gradual drop. The proportion of
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people
who
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aged
over 65 giving
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money
to charity accounted for about 33%.

Turning to 2010, it
is revealed
that there was a significant rise in the percentage of British
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people
who donate
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money
(approximately 6% for those
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aged
18 to 25 and 24% for that
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age
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group
of 26 to 35). A similar trend can
be observed
for the
next
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group
and hit its peak at about 40%for those
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aged
51 to 65. In contrary, an opposing trend can be
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age
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(
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people
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aged
over 65).
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v. 4

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