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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v.3

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v. 3
The chart examines the levels of donation contributions by British people of different ages in two different years - 1990 and 2010. Overall, a greater percentage of British people gave money to charity in 1990 than in 2010 except for the people who were over 50 years old. It is worth noticing that, elder people donated more for charity than their younger counterparts. In 1990, 42% of the 36-50 age-group in Britain made charitable donations, and this figure is the highest on the chart. The 18-25s contributed the least at only 17%. By 2010, these figures had fallen significantly to 35% and 7% respectively. The level of donations from the 26-35 age-group also experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%. While donations up to the age of 50 declined across the two years, they rose among the 51-65 age-group from 35% to nearly 40%, which was the highest percentage for 2010. The figure for the over 65s was lower than this, at 35% but it was still a little higher than the 1990's figure of 32%.
The chart examines the levels of
donation
contributions by British
people
of
different
ages in two
different
years
-
1990 and 2010.

Overall
, a greater percentage of British
people
gave money to charity in 1990 than in 2010
except for
the
people
who were over 50 years
old
. It is worth noticing that, elder
people
donated more for charity than their younger counterparts.

In 1990, 42% of the 36-50 age-group in Britain made charitable
donations
, and this
figure
is the highest on the chart. The 18-25s contributed the least at
only
17%. By 2010, these
figures
had fallen
significantly
to 35% and 7%
respectively
. The level of
donations
from the 26-35 age-group
also
experienced a decrease in 2010 from 31% to 24%.

While
donations
up to the age of 50 declined across the two years, they rose among the 51-65 age-group from 35% to
nearly
40%, which was the highest percentage for 2010. The
figure
for the over 65s was lower than this, at 35%
but
it was
still
a
little
higher than the
1990's
figure
of 32%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. v. 3

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