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The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adult population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000. v.2

The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adult population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000. v. 2
The bar chart compares the proportion of obese youngsters in four distinct nations in three years 1980, 1990 and 2000. Overall, it is evident from the chart given that there was an upward trend in the ratio of overweight adults in all countries over the time period. Besides, whereas the rate of adults in the USA who were obese was by far the largest, that of their counterpart in Japan was considerably smaller. In 1980, only about 2 per cent of Japanese young people were overweight, compared to qround 15 per cent of American adults. However, the percentage of Finland and Australia obese younger generation were half of that in America. After a decade, the figure for Japan adults remained relatively stable, while a substantial rise was observed in the proportion of those American adults sufferred obesity, at 23 per cent. On the other hand, the figures for the remaining countries rose marginally by 2 to 4 per cent. In the last stage, the rate of obese adults in the USA continued to increase dramatically by 8 per cent. Similarly, Astralian and Finland overweight adult rates also went up significantly to 21 and 13 per cent, respectively. That of Japanese younger gerneration, in contrast, witnessed a mere increase by 1 per cent to solely 3 per cent.
The bar chart compares the proportion of
obese
youngsters in four distinct nations in three years 1980, 1990 and 2000.

Overall
, it is evident from the chart
given
that there was an upward trend in the ratio of overweight
adults
in all countries over the time period.
Besides
, whereas the rate of
adults
in the USA who were
obese
was by far the largest, that of their counterpart in Japan was
considerably
smaller.

In 1980,
only
about 2 per cent of Japanese young
people
were overweight, compared to
qround
15 per cent of American
adults
.
However
, the percentage of Finland and Australia
obese
younger generation were half of that in America. After a decade, the figure for Japan
adults
remained
relatively
stable, while a substantial rise
was observed
in the proportion of those American
adults
sufferred
obesity, at 23 per cent.
On the other hand
, the figures for the remaining countries rose
marginally
by 2 to 4 per cent.

In the last stage, the rate of
obese
adults
in the USA continued to increase
dramatically
by 8 per cent.
Similarly
,
Astralian
and Finland overweight adult rates
also
went up
significantly
to 21 and 13 per cent,
respectively
. That of Japanese younger
gerneration
,
in contrast
, witnessed a mere increase by 1 per cent to
solely
3 per cent.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adult population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000. v. 2

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