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The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one school district in the USA. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one school district in the USA.
The supplied table illustrates the statistical figures regarding the linguistic options spoken after school by students in a school district in the United States in 2008 and 2014. In the observation of the whole visual, Spanish dominantly made up a major proportion in the number of users and had no sign of decrease, similar to some others. First of all, it is obvious that Spanish became the most favorable language preferred using by high school pupils and even doubled in its amount of users over the period given. Whereas, some of other languages, such as Chinese, Russian and Nepalese, mark a dramatic speed of rising from 2008 to 2014 by quadrupling or fivefold increasing. For instance, Chinese-spoken students significantly upsurged to 4670 while having started at 1875 in the time of six years. In addition, Hindi showed the mild growth by adding a few more. On the other hand, a group of languages had the downward trend. Particularly, two South Asian-originated languages, namely Korean and Vietnamese, remarkably halved in the amount of high school students using in the year of 2014. Finally, at the same time, the Polish demonstrated a slight decline from 110 to 82 students. In conclusion, given by the table is the information of how one school district' s pupils showed the change of linguistic preference in the year of 2008 and 2014.
The supplied table illustrates the statistical figures regarding the linguistic options spoken after
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district in the United States in 2008 and 2014.

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of decrease, similar to
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others.

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language
preferred using by high
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pupils and even doubled in its amount of users over the period
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. Whereas,
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of other
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languages
, such as Chinese, Russian and Nepalese, mark a dramatic speed of rising from 2008 to 2014 by quadrupling or fivefold increasing.
For instance
, Chinese-spoken students
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upsurged to 4670 while having
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at 1875 in the time of six years.
In addition
, Hindi
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showed
the mild growth by adding a few more.

On the other hand
, a group of
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languages
had the downward trend.
Particularly
, two South Asian-originated
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languages
,
namely
Korean and Vietnamese,
remarkably
halved in the amount of high
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school
students using in the year of 2014.
Finally
, at the same time, the Polish demonstrated a slight decline from 110 to 82 students.

In conclusion
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of linguistic preference in the year of 2008 and 2014.
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The conquest of learning is achieved through the knowledge of languages.
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one school district in the USA.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
226 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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