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he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
The bar chart provides the information about the percentage of people using multiple social networking sites in Canada for the year of 2014 and 2015. The comparison among multiple social networking usage is relatively increased from one sites to two sites. Meanwhile, the multiple sites usage shows a decreasing trend from two sites to five sites. The multiple networking sites usage in Canada grew slightly about one to four percent from the year of 2014 to 2015. The highest percentage of people using networking sites is categorized in one site user which is slightly declined from 36% to 28% in respective years. The number of people who use more than one platform are gradually decreased respectively from two sites user to five sites user, and also the number rises from 2014 to 2015. Conversely, the percentage of users who have one site or do not have it at all are dropped slowly in 2015. In addition, the chart indicates lesser contrast between 2014 and 2015 for the two sites user and no site user. Therefore, the data illustrates that people tend to have more than one site platform for social networking subsequently. Likewise, social networking is dominated by one site and two sites users in respective years.
The bar chart provides the information about the percentage of
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social
networking
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in Canada for the
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year
of 2014 and 2015.

The comparison among
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multiple
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social
networking usage is
relatively
increased from one
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sites
to two
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sites
. Meanwhile, the
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multiple
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sites
usage
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shows
a decreasing trend from two
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sites
to five
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sites
. The
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multiple
networking
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sites
usage in Canada grew
slightly
about one to four percent from the
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year
of 2014 to 2015.

The highest percentage of
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people
using networking
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sites
is categorized
in one
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site
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user
which is
slightly
declined from 36% to 28% in respective years.
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The
number of
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people
who
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use
more than one platform are
gradually
decreased
respectively
from two
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sites
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user
to five
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sites
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user
, and
also
the number rises from 2014 to 2015.
Conversely
, the percentage of
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users
who have one
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site
or do not have it at all
are dropped
slowly
in 2015.
In addition
, the chart indicates lesser contrast between 2014 and 2015 for the two
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sites
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user
and no
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site
user.

Therefore
, the data illustrates that
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people
tend to have more than one
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platform for
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social
networking
subsequently
.
Likewise
,
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networking
is dominated
by one
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site
and two
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sites
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users
in respective years.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic he chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

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4 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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