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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015
The graph illustrated the numbers of people used social networking sites in Canada in 2014 and 2015. The bar shows the different social site at two different time period. The Percentages of non social site users are surprising higher in both time period which is almost same (22% and 21%). Same as, the numbers of one site internet users were significantly higher in 2014(36%), it is the highest numbers of population compare among to others social media. Likewise these numbers was fall down by 8% till 2015 and remain 28%. On the other hand the numbers of two sites was almost same at 23 % and 24 % respectively in 2014 and 2015. Meanwhile, the populations of three and four sites users are slightly lower than other users which are only 12% and 5 % in 2014. However these numbers has rose marginally till 2015. Same as the Fiver sites users are dramatically lower, where only 2 % of population has use too with this site, but this figure has slightly changed and remain 4 % in 2015. Over all we can say that the numbers of social site user in Canada has determined by the nature of media, one and two site is most useable site over the country.
The graph illustrated the
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in Canada in 2014 and 2015. The bar
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are surprising higher in both time period which is almost same (22% and 21%). Same as, the
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of one
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was fall down by 8% till 2015 and remain 28%.
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was almost same at 23 % and 24 %
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and remain 4 % in 2015.

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in Canada has determined by the nature of media, one and two
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over the country.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015

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