Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Shares of expenditures for selected categories, United States, Canada, United Kingdom and Japan, 2009. v.2

Shares of expenditures for selected categories, United States, Canada, United Kingdom and Japan, 2009. v. 2
The figure elucidate the expenditure’s shares for several categories in United States, Canada, United Kingdom and Japan in 2009. At first glance, it is evident that comparing to other sectors, housing had a higher number of shares of expenditures instead of others. To begin with, housing approximately had the same percentages for all nations in 2009, between at just above 25% and just over 20%. Nevertheless, food faced a difference scheme, over all, only Japan that succeeded to achieve at well across two-tenths, and other states roughly in between 20% and just under fifteen in hundred. However, In 2009, all states had the percentage of transportation aspect, which constituted approximately in between two in ten and one in ten. In contrast, health care and clothing witnessed a small number of expenditures in 4 countries. It is able to be seen that in health care, only United States that is able to finish at well beyond 10% and other nations are lower rather than United States, which accounted for just less than one-tenths. On the other hand, the number of shares of expenditures of Canada and United Kingdom, which was just above 10%, is higher than United States and Japan, which made up at just below 10%.
The figure
elucidate
the
expenditure’s
shares for several categories in
United
States
, Canada,
United
Kingdom and Japan in 2009. At
first
glance, it is evident that comparing to
other
sectors, housing had a higher number of shares of
expenditures
instead
of others.

To
begin
with, housing approximately had the same percentages for all nations in 2009, between at
just
above 25% and
just
over 20%.
Nevertheless
, food faced a difference scheme, over all,
only
Japan that succeeded to achieve at well across two-tenths, and
other
states
roughly in between 20% and
just
under fifteen in
hundred
.
However
, In 2009, all
states
had the percentage of transportation aspect, which constituted approximately in between two in ten and one in ten.

In contrast
, health care and clothing witnessed a
small
number of
expenditures
in 4 countries. It is able to be
seen
that in health care,
only
United
States
that is
able to finish at well beyond 10% and
other
nations are lower
rather
than
United
States
, which accounted for
just
less than one-tenths. On the
other
hand, the number of shares of
expenditures
of Canada and
United
Kingdom, which was
just
above 10%, is higher than
United
States
and Japan, which made up at
just
below 10%.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic Shares of expenditures for selected categories, United States, Canada, United Kingdom and Japan, 2009. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts