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The chart below describes results of a public opinion poll, where people were asked to name the most important place smoking should be banned from. v.2

The chart below describes results of a public opinion poll, where people were asked to name the most important place smoking should be banned from. v. 2
The pie chart represents percentage wise the areas which should be banned from smoking. The graph illustrates a peoples poll for eight different sectors which should be smokeless. Overall, people think that workplace should be banned most, followed by restaurants and shopping malls due to the inconvenence. However, pubs, bus stops teachers lounges are acceptable with minimal ban on these areas compared to the other localities. About 21% think that workplace should smoke free, followed by 19% and 18% of individuals who want resaurants and shopping malls to be banned from smoking respectively. Whereas, beaches and public trasnports according to around 13% and 11% people should be smoke free. The least areas smoking is acceptable are pubs, bus stops, teachers lounges and public transport polling about 3%, 8%, 7% and 11% of the individuals respectively. To conclude, the society is trying to opine workplace as smokeless sector to a much larger level, than places where smoking has been acceptable which includes pubs and beaches.
The pie chart represents percentage wise the areas which should
be banned
from
smoking
. The graph illustrates a peoples poll for eight
different
sectors which should be smokeless.

Overall
,
people
think
that workplace should
be banned
most, followed by restaurants and shopping malls due to the
inconvenence
.
However
, pubs, bus
stops
teachers lounges are acceptable with minimal ban on these areas compared to the other localities.

About 21%
think
that workplace should smoke free, followed by 19% and 18% of individuals who want
resaurants
and shopping malls to
be banned
from
smoking
respectively
. Whereas, beaches and public
trasnports
according to around 13% and 11%
people
should be smoke free. The least areas
smoking
is acceptable are pubs, bus
stops
, teachers lounges and public transport polling about 3%, 8%, 7% and 11% of the individuals
respectively
.

To conclude
, the society is trying to opine workplace as smokeless sector to a much larger level, than places where
smoking
has been acceptable which includes pubs and beaches.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart below describes results of a public opinion poll, where people were asked to name the most important place smoking should be banned from. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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