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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v.4

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 4
The pie chart and line graph reveal the global sales ratio of Coca-Cola in 2000 and its share price between 1996 and 2001. It is apparently seen that America was the largest market for this brand and its share price was highest in 1998. According to the pie chart, Coca-Cola sold 17. 1 billion unit case in the year 2000 and more than 55% of this sale was made in North and Latin America. They sold around 3. 45 billion unit case in Europe, which was their second largest sales ratio. Asian consumers drank around 16% unit case of Coca-Cola in this year and African and the Middle Eastern citizens together consumed 7% of the total sale in 2000. The line graph shows that the share price of this brand was $36 in 1996 and it rapidly increased in the following years. Except in the middle of 1997, the price kept on going up until it reached its peak at around $80 per share in 1998. Hereafter, the price gradually declined and went below $50 in early 2000. Finally, the share price of Coca-Cola stood at around $60 during the mid-2000.
The pie chart and line graph reveal the global
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sales
ratio of Coca-Cola in 2000 and its
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share
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price
between 1996 and 2001. It is
apparently
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seen
that America was the largest market for this brand and its
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share
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price
was highest in 1998.

According to the pie chart, Coca-Cola sold 17. 1 billion unit case in the year 2000 and more than 55% of this
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sale
was made
in North and Latin America. They sold
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around
3. 45 billion unit case in Europe, which was their second largest
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sales
ratio. Asian consumers drank
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around
16% unit case of Coca-Cola in this year and African and the Middle Eastern citizens together consumed 7% of the total
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sale
in 2000.

The line graph
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shows
that the
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share
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price
of this brand was $36 in 1996 and it
rapidly
increased in the following years. Except in the middle of 1997, the
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price
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kept
on going up until it reached its peak at
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around
$80 per
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share
in 1998. Hereafter, the
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price
gradually
declined and went below $50 in early 2000.
Finally
, the
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share
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price
of Coca-Cola stood at
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around
$60 during the mid-2000.
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IELTS academic The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 4

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  American English
3 paragraphs
191 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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