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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v.2

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 2
The diagrams give data on sales volume of Coca-Cola company in 2000 and also show the share price of this brand from 1996 to 2001. Generally speaking, Coca-Cola made the highest sales in America and Europe in 2000 and it’s share price surged until 1998, after which it showed a downward trend. In 2000, the largest proportion of Coca-Cola (30. 4%), according to the pie chart, was consumed in North America. The second largest consumption came from Latin America which was one-quarter of all sales followed by 20. 5 % in Europe, 16. 4% in Asia and 7% in Africa and Middle-East respectively. It is evident that Americans were the major consumers of Coca-Cola products in 2000. The line graph represents the price per share of Coca-Cola company from 1996 to 2001. It is quite interesting to note that the price per share was lowest at the beginning of 1996 staying just above $35. In the mid of 1996, it showed a steep rise and touched the figure of $50 per share, continuing the same price hike it reached just below $70 in 1997. A sharp increase was observed thereafter where the price was maximum, $80. Afterwards, the price tended to decline steeply until 2000. In mid-2000, the price increased again and at the start of the year 2001, Coca-Cola share was traded at the floor of stock exchange at $55.
The diagrams give data on sales volume of Coca-Cola
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in 2000 and
also
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show
the
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share
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price
of this brand from 1996 to 2001.

Generally
speaking, Coca-Cola made the highest sales in America and Europe in 2000 and it’s
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share
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price
surged until 1998, after which it
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showed
a downward trend.

In 2000, the largest proportion of Coca-Cola (30. 4%), according to the pie chart,
was consumed
in North America. The second largest consumption came from Latin America which was one-quarter of all sales followed by 20. 5 % in Europe, 16. 4% in Asia and 7% in Africa and Middle-East
respectively
. It is evident that Americans were the major consumers of Coca-Cola products in 2000.

The line graph represents the
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price
per
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share
of Coca-Cola
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company
from 1996 to 2001. It is quite interesting to note that the
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price
per
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share
was lowest at the beginning of 1996 staying
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just
above $35. In the mid of 1996, it
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showed
a steep rise and touched the figure of $50 per
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share
, continuing the same
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price
hike it reached
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just
below $70 in 1997. A sharp increase
was observed
thereafter where the
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price
was maximum, $80. Afterwards, the
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price
tended to decline
steeply
until 2000. In mid-2000, the
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price
increased again and at the
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start
of the year 2001, Coca-Cola
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share
was traded
at the floor of stock exchange at $55.
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14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 2

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