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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v.3

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 3
The pie chart and line graph show the data on sales volume and share price of Coca-Cola brand. As is given in the illustration, in the year 2000, Coca-Cola was sold most in America and the share price of Coca-Cola was highest in 1998 and showed some fluctuations. As is presented in the pie chart, in 2000, Coca-Cola had more than 55% sales in Latin and North America. In Europe, it had more than 20% sales volume. In Asia, it sold 16. 45% and in Africa, it had 7% sales volume. This indicates that the American continent had the largest market for Coca-Cola while this market was the lowest in Africa. Again, the share price of Coca-Cola was only $33 in 1996 and this price increased to $68 in 1997. The price reached the highest in 1998 when it was $80 per share. The price then started dropping and with some fluctuations, it reached it around $60 in 2001. In summary, the American Continent was the largest market for Coca-Cola in 2000 and the average share price of it was $60 though this price varied year to year.
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volume and
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of Coca-Cola brand. As is
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of Coca-Cola was highest in 1998 and
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in Latin and North America. In Europe, it had more than 20%
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volume. In Asia, it sold 16. 45% and in Africa, it had 7%
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volume. This indicates that the American continent had the largest market for Coca-Cola while this market was the lowest in Africa.

Again, the
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of Coca-Cola was
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$33 in 1996 and this
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increased to $68 in 1997. The
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reached the highest in 1998 when it was $80 per
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. The
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then
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fluctuations, it reached it around $60 in 2001.

In summary, the American Continent was the largest market for Coca-Cola in 2000 and the average
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of it was $60 though this
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varied year to year.
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IELTS academic The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
188 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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