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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.
The given bar charts demonstrate the ratios of employed workers of both genders in Australia, Japan, Ireland in the years 2005 and 2015. Generally speaking, there were upward trends in all countries and Japan accounted for the highest and lowest percentages of males and females in employment in both years. In 2005, the proportion of employed male workers in Japan was approximately 75% and rose slightly to around 78% in 2015. Those figures in Ireland saw a marginal growth from about 68% to 70% in the examined period, lower 7% and 8% compared to Japan respectively. In 2005, the percentage of men having occupation in Australia is the lowest in comparison with other countries, accounted for roughly 62%. However, it experienced a quite noticeable rise to 70% in 2015, the equal ratio to Ireland in the same year. In 2005, the percentage of women having job in Ireland was largest, occupied for about 44% and it saw a slightly increase by 6%, made up approximately 50% in 2015. On the contrary, the proportion of women in employment in Japan was the smallest over the surveyed period. Its ratio was just about 30% in 2005 and went up quite marginally to 34% in ten years. On the other hand, the ratio of females having job in Australia increased significantly from around 38% in 2005 to about 55% in 2015, which made it become the biggest ratio of employed female workers in three countries at the end of the survey.
The
given
bar charts demonstrate the
ratios
of employed workers of both genders in Australia,
Japan
, Ireland in the years 2005 and 2015.

Generally
speaking, there were upward trends in all countries and
Japan
accounted for the highest and lowest percentages of males and females in employment in both years.

In 2005, the proportion of employed male workers in
Japan
was approximately 75% and rose
slightly
to around 78% in 2015. Those figures in Ireland
saw
a marginal growth from about 68% to 70% in the examined period, lower 7% and 8% compared to
Japan
respectively
. In 2005, the percentage of
men
having occupation in Australia is the lowest
in comparison
with other countries, accounted for roughly 62%.
However
, it experienced a quite noticeable rise to 70% in 2015, the equal
ratio
to Ireland in the same year.

In 2005, the percentage of women having job in Ireland was largest, occupied for about 44% and it
saw
a
slightly increase
by 6%, made up approximately 50% in 2015.
On the contrary
, the proportion of women in employment in
Japan
was the smallest over the surveyed period. Its
ratio
was
just
about 30% in 2005 and went up quite
marginally
to 34% in ten years.
On the other hand
, the
ratio
of females having job in Australia increased
significantly
from around 38% in 2005 to about 55% in 2015, which made it become the biggest
ratio
of employed female workers in three countries at the
end
of the survey.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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