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The bar graph shows the number of overseas students enrolled in the first year law course at a college. v.2

The bar graph shows the number of overseas students enrolled in the first year law course at a college. v. 2
The bar graph demonstrate the overseas students take admission according to the gender and in interesting field of law at college. Overall, what stand out from the graph is that while male students of Indonesia and Japan were respectively, shoot up. At this point, France students were tumble. With regarding to in Iran males and females students go down in labour law which are about 5 and 3 students respectively and next which who company law student approximately double. Additionally, in Philippines there are 3 males students and 1female are considerably intrusting in labour law and in the company law student dramatically changed. In contrast, Indonesia labour law student remainly same as well as females. But company law male students is shoot up. Turning to, in Japan males students are soar intrusting and females are approximately 5 students. However, France is a country which are no one female students of company law very decline students of labour law. Following this, total number of students steadily same and 3 students are reached at the final.
The bar graph demonstrate the overseas
students
take admission according to the gender and in interesting field of
law
at college.

Overall
, what stand out from the graph is that while male
students
of Indonesia and Japan were
respectively
, shoot up. At this point, France
students
were
tumble
.

With
regarding to
in Iran
males
and
females
students
go down in
labour
law
which are about 5 and 3
students
respectively
and
next
which who
company
law
student
approximately double.
Additionally
,
in Philippines
there are 3
males
students
and
1female
are
considerably
intrusting
in
labour
law
and in the
company
law
student
dramatically
changed
.
In contrast
, Indonesia
labour
law
student
remainly
same
as well
as
females
.
But
company
law
male
students
is shoot up.

Turning to, in Japan
males
students
are soar
intrusting
and
females
are approximately 5
students
.
However
, France is a country which are no one
female
students
of
company
law
very
decline
students
of
labour
law
. Following this, total number of
students
steadily
same and 3
students
are reached
at the final.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar graph shows the number of overseas students enrolled in the first year law course at a college. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
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