Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The bar charts shows co2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union and European Union funds being spent on different forms of transportation. v.2

The bar charts shows co2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union and European Union funds being spent on different forms of transportation. v. 2
The graph compare Co2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union and the pie charts illustrate forms of transportation. Overall as can be seen they is not correlation between Co2 bar chart and money spent pie chat, event both of them showing the same theme, which is transportation, but still they have not correlation. In the bar charts they got information that produce much or less co2 emission and when they see on pie charts, they can will see which transport infrastructure which got more attention from European union and than the answer is roads. In the graphs charts showed coaches is co2 emission a small percentage roughly 45%, then maritime and rail got percent precisely in 50%, while air transport the highest percentage rather than buses and passenger cars because the buses still in 70%, passenger cars in around 130% and then the air on 375% the amount is very significant between another co2 emissions. In the pie charts, the roads in dominate in finish cost in European union, the roads still in 53%, internet modal, inland waterway and airports a very small proportion only 1% and unknown, ports are slightly higher it on 2%, railways 31% and public transportation still in 10%.
The graph compare Co2 emissions for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
forms of transport in the European Union and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
illustrate forms of transportation.
Overall
as can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
they
Use third-person plural verb with 'they': "are", "were".
is
not correlation between Co2 bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
and money spent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pie
chat,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
both of them showing the same theme, which is transportation,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
they have not correlation. In the bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
information that produce much or less co2 emission and when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
, they can will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
which transport infrastructure which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
more attention from
The proper noun "European Union" needs to be capitalized.
European union
and
Did you mean "then"?
than
the answer is roads.

In the graphs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
coaches is co2 emission a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
percentage roughly 45%, then maritime and rail
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
percent
precisely
in 50%, while air transport the highest percentage
rather
than buses and passenger cars
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the buses
still
in 70%, passenger cars in around 130% and then the air on 375% the amount is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
significant between another co2 emissions.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
, the roads
Adverb repetition. Please, verify.
in dominate in
finish cost in
The proper noun "European Union" needs to be capitalized.
European union
, the roads
still
in 53%, internet modal, inland waterway and airports a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
proportion
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
1% and unknown, ports are
slightly
higher
It seems that a verb is missing after "it". Please verify.
it
on 2%, railways 31% and public transportation
still
in 10%.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
A different language is a different vision of life.
Federico Fellini

IELTS academic The bar charts shows co2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union and European Union funds being spent on different forms of transportation. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts