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The bar chart below gives information about the amount of tax that various and cultural organizations were required to pay last year v.2

The bar chart below gives information about the amount of tax that various and cultural organizations were required to pay last year v. 2
The presented bar graph outlines the information on tax payment and tax exemption of various organizations in the last year. A glance at the chart reveals that tax paying institutions out number by 9048 more than the institutions that are exempted from paying. Coming to tax payable art and cultural companies, art performing organizations stood top in payment. With 11, 407 institutions which is more than all the other tax paying organizations combined. Interestingly, all the companies in retail art section has to pay tax which stood in second place after art performing organizations. In contrast, companies below 1000 is to pay tax in museum and historical sites etc. , Which is least of all. Then, exemption from tax in historical sites and the ones that exhibit historical artifacts is more with 4, 793 institutions. With this number, it occupies the top place in the figures. Secondly, art performing organizations took next place with 914 companies less than museums in tax exemption. Unfortunately, there is no such thing of tax exemption in retail art dealers institution.
The presented bar graph outlines the information on tax

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exemption
of various
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organizations
in the
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last year
.

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paying institutions out number by 9048 more than the institutions that
are exempted
from paying.

Coming to
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tax
payable
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art
and cultural
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companies
,
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art
performing
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organizations
stood top in payment. With 11, 407 institutions which is more than all the other
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tax
paying
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organizations
combined.
Interestingly
, all the
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companies
in retail
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art
section
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has to
pay
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tax
which stood in second place after
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art
performing
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organizations
.
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,
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companies
below 1000 is to pay
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tax
in museum and historical sites etc.
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,
Which is least of all.

Then,
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exemption
from
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tax
in historical sites and the ones that exhibit historical artifacts is more with 4, 793 institutions. With this number, it occupies the top place in the figures.
Secondly
,
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art
performing
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organizations
took
next
place with 914
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companies
less than museums in
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tax
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exemption
. Unfortunately, there is no such thing of
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tax
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exemption
in retail
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art
dealers
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institution
.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about the amount of tax that various and cultural organizations were required to pay last year v. 2

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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