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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an avarage Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make com v.2

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an avarage Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The first given chart presents the proportion of energy consumed in an ordinary family in Australia, while the other illustrates how the greenhouse gas releases which is in the consequence of this power consumption. A glance at the grasp reveals that heating spends the largest percentage of power, approximately two-fifths, contrast to a tiny portion of cooling but they are going up side down in gas emittions. It is apparently seen that the rate of energy using for lighting and refregation has a resemble change in greenhouse gas emissions. The former accounts a tiny fractions (4%) and produces axactly to the double number. The latter has the same situation with the figure of 7% in using and 14% in leaking. Another major proportion of energy consumption is water heating, which have the similar statistic in using and emission, less than a third and 32% respectively. The rest of power is used for other appliances, at 15% and this percentage increases more than a quater.
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chart presents the proportion of energy consumed in an ordinary family in Australia, while the other illustrates how the greenhouse gas releases which is in the consequence of this power consumption.

A glance at the grasp reveals that heating spends the largest percentage of power, approximately two-fifths, contrast to a tiny portion of cooling
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they are going up side down in gas
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emittions
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seen
that the rate of energy using for lighting and
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refregation
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a resemble
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change
in greenhouse gas emissions. The former accounts a tiny
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fractions
(4%) and produces
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axactly
to the double number. The latter has the same situation with the figure of 7% in using and 14% in leaking.

Another major proportion of energy consumption is water heating, which have the similar statistic in using and emission, less than a third and 32%
respectively
. The rest of power is
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used
for other appliances, at 15% and this percentage increases more than a
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quater
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1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an avarage Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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