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Below is the chart showing incidence of serious crime in a large UK city from December to November. Total incidences of violent crime are shown in addition to incidences of 4 serious crime types. v.2

Below is the chart showing incidence of serious crime in a large UK city from December to November. Total incidences of violent crime are shown in addition to incidences of 4 serious crime types. v. 2
The presented line graph outlines the changes in number of four vicious crimes committed by Britain people over 11 months time period. A glance at the graph reveals that the theft, wild crime and criminal damage almost remained flat over the time period with unnoticeable fluctuations. On the other side, antisocial behavior witnessed increasing trend with sharp ups and downs. Criminal damage and theft maintained same number throughout the time period. They started with 100 members at starting of December and ended in November with almost same number of approximately 90 and 110 respectively. However, a slight ups and downs were noticed after close observation. Whereas, wild crime started with 200 member, fall slightly in the month of march and increased to its peaks in the month of August and increased its number by the end of November. And antisocial behavior with 500 decreased in the mid February and saw its peaks in the month of October with fluctuation in between. It fall from October to end of November by approximately 200 members
The presented line graph outlines the
changes
in
number
of four vicious crimes committed by Britain
people
over 11
months
time period.

A glance at the graph reveals that the theft, wild crime and criminal damage almost remained flat over the time period with unnoticeable fluctuations. On the other side, antisocial behavior witnessed increasing trend with sharp ups and downs.

Criminal damage and theft maintained same
number
throughout the time period. They
started
with 100 members at starting of December and ended in November with almost same
number
of approximately 90 and 110
respectively
.
However
, a slight ups and downs
were noticed
after close observation.

Whereas, wild crime
started
with 200
member
, fall
slightly
in the
month
of march and increased to its peaks in the
month
of August and increased its
number
by the
end
of November. And antisocial behavior with 500 decreased in the mid February and
saw
its peaks in the
month
of October with fluctuation in between. It
fall
from October to
end
of November by approximately 200
members
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic Below is the chart showing incidence of serious crime in a large UK city from December to November. Total incidences of violent crime are shown in addition to incidences of 4 serious crime types. v. 2

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6.0
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