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The bar charts illustrate the alterations and differences in the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA. v.2

The bar charts illustrate the alterations and differences in the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA. v. 2
The bar charts illustrate the alterations and differences in the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA. Overall, most unhealthy nutrients were consumed at dinner which contained the largest portion of sodium accounted for 43%, the second contribution was saturated fat about 37%. Breakfast was likely to be the healthiest meal in a day due to all the smallest proportions of 3 nutrients were belong to the meal in the morning, at 14% to 16% daily average contributions. Meanwhile, Americans took a lot of sodium and saturated fats for lunch, about 29% and 26% respectively. And added sugar had a smaller portion in lunch at only 19%, while the largest added sugars consumption in the day were for snacks, accounted for a quarter of total added sugars consumed. In conclusion, Americans ate breakfast with the less unhealthy nutrients while dinner was compounded with a significant amount of nutrients that harmful.
The bar charts illustrate the alterations and differences in the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and
added
sugars
in typical meals consumed in the USA.

Overall
, most unhealthy
nutrients
were consumed
at dinner which contained the largest portion of sodium accounted for 43%, the second contribution
was saturated
fat
about 37%.

Breakfast was likely to be the healthiest meal in a day due to all the smallest proportions of 3
nutrients
were
belong
to the meal in the morning, at 14% to 16% daily average contributions. Meanwhile, Americans took
a lot of
sodium and saturated fats for lunch, about 29% and 26%
respectively
. And
added
sugar
had a smaller portion in lunch at
only
19%, while the largest
added
sugars
consumption in the day were for snacks, accounted for a quarter of total
added
sugars
consumed.

In conclusion
, Americans ate breakfast with the less unhealthy
nutrients
while dinner
was compounded
with a significant amount of
nutrients
that harmful.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar charts illustrate the alterations and differences in the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA. v. 2

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