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The charts below show the electricity generated in Germany and France for all sources and renewables in years 2009 v.2

The charts below show the electricity generated in Germany and France for all sources and renewables in years 2009 v. 2
The pie charts given below illustrate the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. The data is measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that the biggest percentage for all types was conventional thermal in Germany and followed by nuclear in France. While the most popular percentage for renewables was biomas in Germany and followed by hydroelectric in Japan. Based on the all types charts in Germany, the largest percentage was conventional thermal, which was 59. 6%. Different from all types in France, the most popular sources was nuclear, it got 76, 0%. While, nuclear in Germany was the second biggest sources. Renewables in all types germany was the lowest sources, but it had second sources in France. On the other hand, renewables was devided into 5 categories, which were biomass, hydroelectric, solar, geothermal and wind. The dominated renewables in Germany was Biomas. Meanwhile, hydroelectric as the biggest renewables in France, which was more than four fifths. Both of renewables in germany and france, wind as the second dominated percentage. Renewables of geothermal was the lowest percentage in Germany, it had 0, 0%. This was also the case for Geothermal in France, which experienced very low levels.
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was conventional thermal in Germany and followed by nuclear in France. While the most popular
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IELTS academic The charts below show the electricity generated in Germany and France for all sources and renewables in years 2009 v. 2

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