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The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. v. 2

The illustration expresses the opinion of Londoners across three years about the paramount and poorest aspects of living in London. Overall, shopping, job, night life and places to visit were picked as the greatest things about living in London while cost, traffic jam and crime were picked as the vilest thing there. Interestingly, cross-cultural people and transport were voted both as good and bad aspects about this city. The highest percentage of Londoners, over 40%, believe that shopping experience in London is the best thing about living in this city. Around 35% of them picked employment facilities as the second most attractive aspects in London. Activities like night life, visiting places were mentioned by one-quarter of them as advantageous. On the contrary, half of them expressed their concerns about the cost of living. A similar presentence of the survey takers expressed traffic congestion as a hindrance for their living. Crime was another worst thing about London according to these survey participants. Interestingly, cross-culture and transports were both mentioned as great and worst thing about life in London. Finally, majority of the citizens expressed their apprehensions about litter, noise and air quality to be major issues.

IELTS academic The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. v.2

The illustration expresses the opinion of Londoners across three years about the paramount and poorest aspects of living in London.
Overall
, shopping, job,
night life
and places to visit
were picked
as the greatest things about living in London while cost, traffic jam and crime
were picked
as the vilest thing there.
Interestingly
, cross-cultural
people
and transport
were voted
both as
good
and
bad
aspects about this city. The highest percentage of Londoners, over 40%, believe that shopping experience in London is the best thing about living in this city. Around 35% of them picked employment facilities as the second most attractive aspects in London. Activities like
night life
, visiting places
were mentioned
by one-quarter of them as advantageous.
On the contrary
, half of them expressed their concerns about the cost of living. A similar
presentence
of the survey takers expressed traffic congestion as a hindrance for their living. Crime was another worst thing about London according to these survey participants.
Interestingly
, cross-culture and transports were both mentioned as great and worst thing about life in London.
Finally
,
majority of
the citizens expressed their apprehensions about litter, noise and air quality to be major issues.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
3 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
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