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The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. v.1

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. v. 1
The graphs reveal data of a survey that shows how Londoners feel about living in London by expressing the greatest and worst thing they face. The data also presents the ratio of these people who think litter, air quality and noise are some primary concerns. Generally speaking, freedom of shopping, employment and multicultural environment are the best things about London while costs, crime and mixture of races are the main hindrance of quality life in London, according to the survey takers. The bar graphs consider people’s opinion in three years regarding the paramount and poorest aspect of living in London. As is presented, the highest percentages of Londoners, roughly 42-45 percent, think that the range of shopping is the best thing they enjoy about London. Around 35% Londoners voted for job and cross-cultural citizens as main advantages. Night life, places to visit and transport facilities were picked by approximately 20-25% people in these years as the main attraction for dwelling in London. Living and housing costs, traffic jam and crime were picked by a significant percentage of people as the vilest thing about this city. Interestingly, while some people consider multicultural environment and transports as two main benefits of living in London, more than one third possess an opposite view. Crime was a great problem in the first year but over the time, fewer percentage of people showed their concern about it. Finally, garbage problem was mentioned by the highest ratio of people, 70-75% as a great concern in London while around 65% and 55% on an average considered air quality and noise to be a major problem for living in London.
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living
in London by expressing the greatest and worst thing they face. The data
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people
who
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think
litter, air quality and noise are
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some
primary concerns.
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speaking, freedom of shopping, employment and multicultural environment are the best things about London while costs, crime and mixture of races are the
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main
hindrance of quality life in London, according to the survey takers.

The bar graphs consider
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people’s
opinion in three years regarding the paramount and poorest aspect of
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living
in London. As
is presented
, the highest percentages of Londoners, roughly 42-45 percent,
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think
that the range of shopping is the best thing they enjoy about London. Around 35% Londoners voted for job and cross-cultural citizens as
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main
advantages.
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Night life
, places to visit and transport facilities
were picked
by approximately 20-25%
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people
in these years as the
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main
attraction for dwelling in London.

Living and housing costs, traffic jam and crime
were picked
by a significant percentage of
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people
as the vilest thing about this city.
Interestingly
, while
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some
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people
consider multicultural environment and transports as two
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main
benefits of
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living
in London, more than one third possess an opposite view. Crime was a great problem in the
first
year
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but
over the time, fewer percentage of
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people
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showed
their concern about it.

Finally
, garbage problem
was mentioned
by the highest ratio of
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people
, 70-75% as a great concern in London while around 65% and 55% on an average considered air quality and noise to be a major problem for
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living
in London.
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IELTS academic The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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