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The bar chart shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household devices Write a 150 word report for a university lecturer explaining the data and making comparisons where relevant v.2

The bar chart shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household devices Write a 150 word report for a university lecturer explaining the data and making comparisons where relevant v. 2
The given graph compares the annual amount of energy consumed by a number of 16 household appliances and the corresponding expenses. Overall, it can be seen that while the highest consumption of energy was attributed to a well-functioning spa, the electric blanket, the microwave oven and the television needed minim mount of the whole harnessed electricity. Looking at the details, it seems that keeping the spa in a gook working status requires around 2300 kwh each year which is reflected by the highest expenditure among all given devices, of approximately 1190 dollars. The pool pump needs approximately 1500 kwh and this requires sum of money, of just under 1500 dollars. Meanwhile, the freezer, heating the bed and drying the clothes and the washing machine consumed each roughly between 800 and 1100 kwh and people have to pay for this around 70-85 dollars yearly. By contrast, some in-house activities requires far less for their function. Among them, each of using a computer, washing dishes automatically, using the electric cooking machine or the dehumidifier consumes and cost about half the electricity needed and expenses brought by the refrigerator, which makes up just over 85 dollars. Finally, the television, cooking at the microwave and using an electronic blanket account for the least quantity of power, of around 10, 15 and 17 kwh respectively, and the minimum budget of approximately 15-20 dollars annually.
The
given
graph compares the annual amount of energy consumed by a number of 16 household appliances and the corresponding expenses.
Overall
, it can be
seen
that while the highest consumption of energy
was attributed
to a well-functioning spa, the electric blanket, the microwave oven and the television needed minim mount of the whole harnessed electricity.

Looking at the
details
, it seems that keeping the spa in a
gook
working status requires around 2300
kwh
each year which
is reflected
by the highest expenditure among all
given
devices, of approximately 1190
dollars
. The pool pump needs approximately 1500
kwh
and this requires sum of money, of
just
under 1500
dollars
. Meanwhile, the freezer, heating the bed and drying the clothes and the washing machine consumed each roughly between 800 and 1100
kwh
and
people
have to
pay for this around 70-85
dollars
yearly. By contrast,
some
in-
house
activities requires far less for their function. Among them, each of using a computer, washing dishes
automatically
, using the electric cooking machine or the dehumidifier consumes and cost about half the electricity needed and expenses brought by the refrigerator, which
makes
up
just
over 85 dollars.

Finally
, the television, cooking at the microwave and using an electronic blanket account for the least quantity of power, of around 10, 15 and 17
kwh
respectively
, and the minimum budget of approximately 15-20
dollars
annually
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household devices Write a 150 word report for a university lecturer explaining the data and making comparisons where relevant v. 2

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  American English
3 paragraphs
229 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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