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The bar chart bellow shows the perecntage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The bar chart bellow shows the perecntage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart compares the age groups of physical activity from men and women australian in 2010. It is measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that, despite age of men in 15 to 24 had greatest percentage from other groups by men, whereas women has biggest percentage of age groups in 45 to 54. Turning first in 15 to 24. Men had the highest australian of physical activity at 52. 8%, whereas women has lowest rate at 47. 7%. however, over the following in 25 to 34 age groups, there was a sharp fall to 42. 2% by men, on the other hand women increased gradually to 48. 9%. next in 35 to 44, the number groups of women which grew rapidly at 52. 5%. at the some time percentage of men suffered at dramatic decline to 39. 5%. Afterwards, in 45 to 54 age groups men and women go through increased significantly to 43. 1% and 53. 3%. after that in 55 to 64, women has experienced slighty fall to 53% and men growth gradually to 45. 1%. at the end of the age groups period, both of them have a closer look at the men by 46. 7% and women by 47. 1%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart bellow shows the perecntage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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