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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for twocompanies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows theprojected market share of the two companies in jeans at the endof next year. v.2

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for twocompanies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows theprojected market share of the two companies in jeans at the endof next year. v. 2
The bar chart depicts approximated sales of jeans in 2 various planets, Mango and Jack & Jones, in Turkey in the next year. The pie chart indicates the percentage of sale by the 2 companies and other productors in next year. Overall, as it can be seen the quantity of sales will have an increasment trend during the year by 2 companies and both will have half share of total jean sales. Mango will has more than 100 thousands of pairs, whereas the other one will has less than 500, 000. In the February both will decreased but Mango will sale almost 50% less than other company. After that both will increase and in July and August Mongo will has a more quantity from sales but this trend will not continued and in the last 4 mounts both increase but Jack & Jones will sale more than other planet. Totally predicts that in the end of next year Mango and Jack & Jones will have 20% and 30% respectively in sales of pair in Turkey and other half will is share of other jean productors.
The bar chart depicts approximated
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sales
of jeans in 2 various planets, Mango and Jack
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&amp
; Jones, in Turkey in the
next
year. The pie chart indicates the percentage of
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sale
by the 2
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companies
and
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other
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productors
in
next
year.

Overall
, as it can be
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seen
the quantity of
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sales
will have an
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increasment
trend during the year by 2
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companies
and both will have half share of total jean
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sales
. Mango will
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has
more than
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100 thousands of
pairs, whereas the
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other
one will
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has
less than 500, 000. In the February both will decreased
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but
Mango will
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sale
almost 50% less than
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other
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company
. After that both will increase and in July and August
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Mongo
will has a more quantity from
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sales
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but
this trend will not
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continued
and in the last 4 mounts both increase
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but
Jack
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&amp
; Jones will
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sale
more than
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other
planet.
Totally
predicts that in the
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end
of
next
year Mango and Jack
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&amp
; Jones will have 20% and 30%
respectively
in
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sales
of pair in Turkey and
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other
half will is share of
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other
jean
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productors
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for twocompanies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows theprojected market share of the two companies in jeans at the endof next year. v. 2

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
185 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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