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The graph below shows how the prices of apples and oranges changed between 2010 and 2014 in Australia. v.1

The graph below shows how the prices of apples and oranges changed between 2010 and 2014 in Australia. v. 1
The bar graph compares price variations of apples and oranges in Australia over a 5-year period, commencing from 2010. Overall, the price of these two fruits went up every year and orange became more expensive than apples in later years despite a reverse price scenario in early years. According to the diagram, per pound apple cost approximately 4. 5 dollars in 2010 in Australia. At that time, the price of per pound orange was 4 dollar. Next year, the price of both fruits increased and it took roughly 5 dollars to purchase one pound apple while per pound orange was sold at just over 4 dollars. Interestingly, the price of apple and orange in 2012 became almost identical – 5 dollar. After a year, orange was slightly expensive than apple as their prices were nearly 5 dollars 10 cents and 5 dollars 20 cents respectively. In the final year, 2014,   the orange became even more expensive than apples. At that time, apple was sold for roughly 5 dollars 20 cents per pound while it was approximately 70 cents more for the same amount of orange.
The bar graph compares
price
variations of
apples
and oranges in Australia over a
5-year
period, commencing from 2010.
Overall
, the
price
of these two fruits went up every
year
and orange became more expensive than
apples
in later years despite a reverse
price
scenario in early years.

According to the diagram, per pound
apple
cost approximately 4. 5
dollars
in 2010 in Australia. At that time, the
price
of per pound orange was 4
dollar
.
Next
year
, the
price
of both fruits increased and it took roughly 5
dollars
to
purchase
one pound
apple
while per pound orange
was sold
at
just
over 4
dollars
.
Interestingly
, the
price
of
apple
and orange in 2012 became almost identical
5
dollar
. After a
year
, orange was
slightly
expensive
than
apple
as their
prices
were
nearly
5
dollars
10 cents and 5
dollars
20 cents
respectively
. In the final
year
, 2014,
 
the orange became even more expensive than
apples
. At that time,
apple
was sold
for roughly 5
dollars
20 cents per pound while it was approximately 70 cents more for the same amount of orange.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows how the prices of apples and oranges changed between 2010 and 2014 in Australia. v. 1

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186 words
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