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The graph below gives information on the performance of a train company in October and November in 2008 v.2

The graph below gives information on the performance of a train company in October and November in 2008 v. 2
The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of trains, from a particular company, that were either cancelled or running late in October and November in 2008. Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that the proportion of train trips that were delayed and cancelled both witnessed fluctuations strong over the period shown. Additionally, the highest rate of the trains cancelled happened in 2nd week of October, while the figure for late trains also in the 2nd week of November. In the first week of October, about 20% of all trains did not run on time. The figure rose slightly during the next week before dropping to around 5% in the last week of October. In contrast, when came November, more half of all trains ran late more than the schedule in the second week in November, followed by a mild fall to 40% in the third week. Only 1% of train tours was not operated in the first week. However, the percentage of trains that were cancelled reached a peak of 7% in the second week but later dipped back to the initial figure. After that, there was a significant oscillation in the rest of the period, with about 4% of all trains being cancelled in the final week.
The two-line graphs illustrate the percentage of
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trains
, from a particular
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company
, that were either
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cancelled
or running late in October and November in 2008.

Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that the proportion of
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train
trips that
were delayed
and
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cancelled
both witnessed fluctuations strong over the period shown.
Additionally
, the highest rate of the
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trains
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cancelled
happened in 2nd
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week
of October, while the figure for late
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trains
also
in the 2nd
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week
of November.

In the
first
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week
of October, about 20% of all
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trains
did not run on time. The figure rose
slightly
during the
next
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week
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before
dropping to around 5% in the last
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week
of October.
In contrast
, when came November, more half of all
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trains
ran late more than the schedule in the second
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week
in November, followed by a mild fall to 40% in the third week.

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Only
1% of
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train
tours was not operated in the
first
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week
.
However
, the percentage of
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trains
that were
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cancelled
reached a peak of 7% in the second
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week
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but
later dipped back to the initial figure. After that, there was a significant oscillation in the rest of the period, with about 4% of all
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trains
being
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cancelled
in the final
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week
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below gives information on the performance of a train company in October and November in 2008 v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
209 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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