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The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of population in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai. v.1

The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of population in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai. v. 1
The bar chart illustrates the population of three different towns in 1990, namely Jakarta, Shanghai and Sao Paulo, as well as the estimated and real figures of the people in 2000. Looking at the graph, it is obvious that Sao Paulo was the city with the most resident living, the opposite was true for Jakarta city. Noticeably, there were significant differences in the predicted and actual figures for 2000 in all countries. Around 17 million people in 1990, the population of Sao Paulo, the most populous area of the three examined cities, nearly 2 times higher than Jakarta with about 8 million. The figures for Sao Paulo and Jakarta were expected to rise by approximately 5 million and nearly 3 million in the over next decade, respectively. However, the sum of the citizen in both cities increased more than supposed. Details, the true population in the Jakarta region rose to around 13 million and this figure outnumbered about 3 million compared with the forecast, almost 24 million in Sao Paulo city. Regarding the part of China, Shanghai, the population here reached nearly 13 million in 1990. However, while the other two areas experienced an increase, the number of citizens not only did not go up as the plan but also decreased to 11 million people in 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the
population
of three
different
towns in 1990,
namely
Jakarta, Shanghai and
Sao Paulo
,
as well
as the estimated and real
figures
of the
people
in 2000.

Looking at the graph, it is obvious that
Sao Paulo
was the city with the most resident living, the opposite was true for Jakarta city.
Noticeably
, there were significant differences in the predicted and actual
figures
for 2000 in all countries.

Around 17
million
people
in 1990, the
population
of
Sao Paulo
, the most populous area of the three examined
cities
,
nearly
2 times higher than Jakarta with about 8
million
. The
figures
for
Sao Paulo
and Jakarta were
expected
to rise by approximately 5
million
and
nearly
3
million
in the over
next
decade,
respectively
.
However
, the sum of the citizen in both
cities
increased more than supposed.
Details
, the true
population
in the Jakarta region rose to around 13
million
and this
figure
outnumbered about 3
million
compared with the forecast, almost 24
million
in
Sao Paulo
city.

Regarding the part of China, Shanghai, the
population
here reached
nearly
13
million
in 1990.
However
, while the other two areas experienced an increase, the number of citizens not
only
did not go up as the plan
but
also
decreased to 11
million
people
in 2000.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of population in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai. v. 1

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