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The bar chart below show the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia v.2

The bar chart below show the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia v. 2
This bar chart shows the participation of 5 to 14 years old boys and girls in 5 leisure activities (Stake Boarding, Bike riding, Watching TV, Computer games and Art and Craft) in percentage. Overall, both boys and girls shows a great interest in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%, whereas boys shows least interest in Art and Craft which is about 30% and girls shows least interest in Skate boarding which is about 25% Both boys and girls have shown some great interest in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%. They also having great interest in electronic games which is about 80% for boys and 60% for girls. Both of them have interest in bike riding as well which is about 70% for boys and 60% for girls. On the other side both boys and girls have least interest in Skate riding activity which is about 30% for boys and 25% for girls. Girls shows some more interest than boys in Art and Craft which is about 40% and 25% respectively.
This bar chart
shows
the participation of 5 to 14 years
old
boys
and
girls
in 5 leisure activities (Stake Boarding, Bike riding, Watching TV, Computer games and Art and Craft) in percentage.

Overall
, both
boys
and
girls
shows
a great
interest
in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%, whereas
boys
shows
least
interest
in Art and Craft which is about 30% and
girls
shows
least
interest
in Skate boarding which is about 25%

Both
boys
and
girls
have shown
some
great
interest
in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%. They
also
having great
interest
in electronic games which is about 80% for
boys
and 60% for
girls
. Both of them have
interest
in bike riding
as well
which is about 70% for
boys
and 60% for girls.

On the other side both
boys
and
girls
have
least
interest
in Skate riding activity which is about 30% for
boys
and 25% for
girls
.
Girls
shows
some
more
interest
than
boys
in Art and Craft which is about 40% and 25%
respectively
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below show the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
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