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The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. v.1

The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. v. 1
The supplied bar chart depicts information about motor vehicle possessions in China during a twelve-year period since 1987 until 1999. In general, the number of motors owned by citizens increased gradually and marked a noticeable change of vehicle ownership during the observed times. Looking at the details, vehicle ownership in China in 1987 pertained a figure about 300 vehicles per thousand individuals. This number swelled modestly between the year of 1987 and before 1995 which was about 1000 vehicles per thousand people. Furthermore, in 1995, the number of motor possessions went up dramatically, about 2000 vehicles and was doubled than the previous number. This figure grew significantly through the following years and in 1999, it accounted a steep increase, almost 4, 100 vehicles had per thousand citizens. The figure extremely noticed a significant change of vehicle ownership between 1987 and 1999. In 1999, it was reckoned approximately twelve times higher than the rate of vehicle possessions in China in 1987.
The supplied bar chart depicts information about motor
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vehicle
possessions in China during a twelve-year period since 1987 until 1999.
In general
, the
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number
of motors
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owned
by citizens increased
gradually
and marked a noticeable
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change
of
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vehicle
ownership during the observed times.

Looking at the
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details
,
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vehicle
ownership in China in 1987 pertained a figure about 300
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vehicles
per thousand individuals. This
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number
swelled
modestly
between the year of 1987 and
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before
1995 which was about 1000
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vehicles
per thousand
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people
.
Furthermore
, in 1995, the
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number
of motor possessions went up
dramatically
, about 2000
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vehicles
and
was doubled
than the previous
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number
. This figure grew
significantly
through the following years and in 1999, it accounted a steep increase, almost 4, 100
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vehicles
had per thousand citizens. The figure
extremely
noticed a significant
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change
of
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vehicle
ownership between 1987 and 1999. In 1999, it
was reckoned
approximately twelve times higher than the rate of
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vehicle
possessions in China in 1987.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about vehicle ownership in China. v. 1

Academic
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2 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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