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The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year. v.3

The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year. v. 3
The provided graph describes the yearly water consumption from ground water and public supply by 7 manufacturers in some country. The unit is measured in millions of cubic meters. Overall, the ground water usage is far more than public supply in most industries. Both of water supplies are mostly used in the chemical industry while the least consumption could be observed in textile and fuel industries. Looking at the detail, the chemical manufacturing requires 430 million m3 of ground water which is approximately twice than the water consumption in metal and paper industries. In this area, public water is also used highly, contributing 240 million m3 which is almost three times as many as metal industries’ water usage. Meanwhile, the company that uses less water is fuel and textiles and each of them only needs 10 million of public water and over 70 million for ground water. Food and drink companies have more demand for public supply than ground water supply, gaining 190 million m3 as opposed to 110 million from ground water. It is also true for the machinery comprises that consumes 100 million cubic meters of public water supply which is 10 times higher than the quantity of ground water.
The provided graph
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describes
the yearly
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water
consumption from
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ground
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water
and
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public
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supply
by 7 manufacturers in
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some
country. The unit
is measured
in
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millions
of cubic meters.

Overall
, the
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ground
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water
usage is far more than
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public
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supply
in most
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industries
. Both of
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water
supplies are
mostly
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used
in the chemical
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industry
while the least consumption could
be observed
in textile and fuel industries.

Looking at the detail, the chemical manufacturing requires 430
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million
m3 of
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ground
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water
which is approximately
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twice
than the
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water
consumption in metal and paper
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industries
. In this area,
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public
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water
is
also
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used
highly
, contributing 240
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million
m3 which is almost three times as
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many
as metal
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industries’
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water
usage. Meanwhile, the
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company
that
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uses
less
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water
is fuel and textiles and each of them
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only
needs 10
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million
of
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public
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water
and over 70
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million
for
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ground
water.

Food and drink
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companies
have more demand for
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public
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supply
than
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ground
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water
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supply
, gaining 190
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million
m3 as opposed to 110
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million
from
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ground
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water
. It is
also
true for the machinery comprises that consumes 100
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million
cubic meters of
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public
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water
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supply
which is 10 times higher than the quantity of
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ground
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water
.
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year. v. 3

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