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The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. v.2

The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. v. 2
The chart represents how many British and international students studied a computer science major by its gender in the UK University from 2010 to 2012. Overall, there were more British students than that of international students studied for the computer science for the projected periods. Among them, there was more number of women than that of men. In terms of male students, about 40 British students studied a computer science, whereas 20 international students were in the UK University in 2010. By 2011, UK University experienced to have 25 students in a computer science major for both countries and it rose drastically to reach at about 42 British male students and close to 40 international male students by 2012. Meanwhile, there were higher British women students than that of international students studied the computer science throughout the projected periods. About 32 British students and close to 15 international students studied in the computer science in 2010. In the next two consecutive years, British female students rose significantly to close to 45 students while the number of international students increased constantly to end at 20 students.
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major by its gender in the UK University from 2010 to 2012.

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than that of
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for the computer
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for the projected periods. Among them, there was more number of women than that of
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In terms of male
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, about 40 British
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a computer
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, whereas 20
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were in the UK University in 2010. By 2011, UK University experienced to have 25
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in a computer
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major for both countries and it rose
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and close to 40
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male
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by 2012.

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than that of
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the computer
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throughout the projected periods. About 32 British
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and close to 15
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in the computer
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in 2010. In the
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rose
significantly
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while the number of
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IELTS academic The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. v. 2

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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