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The chars below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. v.2

The chars below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. v. 2
The two pie charts depicts the information about the percentage of monthly domestic income expenditures on types items by two different categories in one European country. At first glance, it is clearly seen that, the maximum percentage of household earing spend on food and drinks which was 29% whereas, the minimum percentage of domestic income expenditures were utilized in restaurants which was 4% further, the percentage of households pays on spending on misellano and clothes which was 18% and 5% respectively. Moreover, there was about 6% difference between the proportion of domestic pay consumed on clothing and recreation culture. Moving further, the percentage of domestic income consumed on recreation culture was 3 times more as compared to fuel Bills. while, there was a 8% difference between the proportion of households pay spend on food and drink, clothing following the 10% of households Pay consumed on transports which was 10% Overall, the highest percentage of household income spend on food and drink by high income group.
The two pie charts depicts the information about the
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income
expenditures on types items by two
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different
categories in one European country.

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first
glance, it is
clearly
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that, the maximum
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percentage
of
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household
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earing
spend on food and drinks which was 29% whereas, the minimum
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percentage
of
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domestic
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income
expenditures
were utilized
in restaurants which was 4%
further
, the
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percentage
of
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households
pays on spending on
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misellano
and clothes which was 18% and 5%
respectively
.
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, there was about 6% difference between the proportion of
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domestic
pay consumed on clothing and recreation culture.

Moving
further
, the
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percentage
of
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domestic
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income
consumed on recreation culture was 3 times more
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as
compared to fuel Bills.
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while
, there was
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a
8% difference between the proportion of
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households
pay spend on food and drink, clothing following the 10% of households

Pay consumed on transports which was 10%

Overall
, the highest
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percentage
of
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household
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income
spend on food and drink by high
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income
group.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The chars below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. v. 2

Academic
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5 paragraphs
165 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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